BLUE TAKES AWAY THE
FOOTPRINTS, I LEAVE ON THE FLOOR
FOR THE GOLDEN SHORE,
ALONG GOES THE WORDS
INSCRIBED AND PRECIOUS DOLL HOUSE
I MAKE WITH THE SAND,
I DROP MY TEAR ON
THE FLOOR, BLUE GOES BACK, BRINGS FOR
ME PEARL FROM ITS HEART,
WORTHY FRIENDS MIX UP
CREATE GOLDEN AROMA
GIVING MY SMILE BACK.
written for: Haiku heights
I am glad you got your smile back ~
ReplyDeleteha ha ha .. so am i .. thanks grace :)
DeleteLovely,I like the image of the sea washing away those many things.
ReplyDeletethanks ellece :)
DeleteThe ocean ~ powerful haiku here ~thanks, namaste, ^_^
ReplyDeletethanks carol :)
DeleteI was thinking of putting a second haiku for vanishing footprints..,you did is so well.. no need for me to do it.. Each haiku shows.. well done.
ReplyDeletethanks a lot sir :)
Deletethanks loredana :)
ReplyDeletebeautiful..i loved it.. nice set. :)
ReplyDeletethanks jayanth :)
Deletebeautifully penned Haiku... :)
ReplyDeleteThere is some problem with the syllables in 2nd of both 2nd and 4th one...check that if possible... :O
thanks cyno ... :) i guess now i am alrite with syllables ... :)
DeleteGlad you were left smiling.
ReplyDeletethanks pattiken :)
DeleteAgree with Cynosure's comment :) The haiku are beautiful, and that syllable count can be fixed I think. Not off by a lot. :)
ReplyDeleteAlso, the first haiku is rhyming; haiku is a non-rhyming form.. please take care!
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Deletethanks leo ... i am happy you checked out my haiku ... i have corrected the syllable count ... but rhyming is not done intentionally ... i will try to improve :)
DeleteAwesome! Very well done, love the picture you're painting with these words.
ReplyDeletethanks kristjaan :)
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